Hi--I'm applying for a highly competitive nursing program, and one of the application requirements is an essay based on why I want to be a nurse. Could you please give me feedback on whether or not my essay is too general? Do I need more personal experiences in it? Thanks!
The functions of the human body and the effects of the environment, drugs, and genetics on humans never failed to catch my high interest; therefore, I inclined toward a career that included these interests. Yet, at the same time, I strongly desired to make a difference in people's lives. Typically, with the two factors of human anatomy and benevolence, people gravitate toward medicine, a field in which they can also earn an admirable income. When it comes to the healthcare field, most assume that a physician is the ideal way of benefiting society and themselves. However, for me, my interests inspired me to pursue a nursing vocation.
With the current dearth of nurses, each nurse takes responsibility for many patients, reducing the optimal amount time and attention the nurse can administer for each patient. Patients will receive the best care if the nurses are able to pay thorough attention to each and every patient. I wish to alleviate some of that pressure placed on nurses by becoming a nurse myself and provide my best service to each patient. Nurses are the next professionals after doctors that people go to for medical assistance, and as a nurse, I will be able provided numerous opportunities to give that needed help and positively influence individuals' lives everyday, whether it be by giving tips about dietary supplements or home remedies for the flu. In addition, the deficiency of nurses ensures job security, which means that I need not concern myself with losing my job anywhere in the near future. For example, teachers across the country are losing their jobs at a steady rate due to the high numbers of teachers and lack of funding, and as a result, they face the stress of having to search for another job. Being a nurse will assure that I will not need to encounter such stress and, instead, will be able to utilize my focus on the patients.
Also, as a nurse, I will be able to assist others both inside and outside the hospital. Mild emergencies may occur at a dinner party, or a friend may need me to briefly check on her ill mother at home. Nursing bestows me the privilege to apply my medical knowledge in any situation at any time, which, in turn, will continually hone my nursing skills. not all occupations allow workers to apply the knowledge of their field outside of their employment place, such as a medical researcher, who must be at their research labs to apply their expertise and for others to comprehend their "research language."
Having those many chances to make a positive impact on individuals' lives on an everyday basis is one of the great aspects of being a nurse. While helping others, I will also be able to nurture my interest in the medical area and not have to face the perplexity of losing my job. Although many people possess the idea that a doctor is the best profession in healthcare to influence others, I, myself, wish to fulfill my desire to become a nurse.
Hi, I think your statement here is very persuasive to prove that you really desire to become a nurse.
Actually, I have no experience about applying undergraduate program. However, I truly applied some graduate programs. Generally speaking, the graduate school just requires a generally personal statement or statement of objective. But, individual interests and some corresponding experiences are highly recommended to be included in statement. It is for graduate admission, which requires research experience. I am not sure whether it is also available for your situation. If so, maybe you can try to add some statement below the third part of your article, to introduce your performance in first aid training, if any. Anyway, I feel your work here is persuasive enough to demonstrate your desire for this program.
This is an IMHO, good luck! ^@^
Typically, with the two factors of human anatomy and benevolence, people gravitate toward medicine, a field in which they ...----- I crossed out the sentence about "at the same time" because the meaningwill still be conveyed without it.
...can also earn an admirable income. Most people assume that becoming a physician is the ideal way of benefiting society and themselves. However, for me, my interests inspired me to pursue a nursing vocation because of the __________ (give the truth that is central to this essay. Is there a word that captures the appeal nirsing has for you?). Then, end paragraph one.
Also, as a nurse, I will be able to assist others both inside and outside the hospital. ---- physicians can, too! Tell us about some of the philosophical ideas... nursing is all about adding energy and lifting spirits. It is distinct, because it serves a distinct purpose.
Then again, a healer is a healer, regardless of whether a physician or a nurse.
Thanks for the feedback~ I liked the idea of "lifting spirits and adding energy" so I tried to incorporate that into my essay. I did revise the essay a bit because I thought it was a bit repetitive and too general. Is this revision better and more personal?
My aspiration for nursing was sparked early in my high school years, during which I attended a club called Medical Explorers. This particular group exposed adolescents to various fields of healthcare; the nursing area was one of them. The functions of the human body and the effects of the environment, drugs, and genetics on humans never failed to capture my high interest. I also possessed a strong interest in making a difference in people's lives with my caring attitude and compassion-when a patient feels concerned previous to a surgery, I can quell their anxiety with comforting words or when a patient is low in spirits, I can lift his or her mood a cheery chat. Therefore, out of the numerous fields that we discussed and explored at Medical Explorers, I decided that pursuing a career in nursing would fulfill my interests the best.
I researched during my own time to learn more about the vocation, and one of the first aspects of nursing that I learned was that there is a dearth of nurses in the nation's hospitals, which reduces the optimal amount of time and attention the nurse can administer for each patient. Patients are able to receive the best care if the nurses are able to pay thorough attention to each and every patient. So, because of the shortage of nurses, nursing will provide me a plethora of chances to interact with patients in order to offer them my undivided attention and caring assistance. I also came to know that diverse fields exist in nursing-medical surgery, ER, ICU, and others. Upon learning these facts about nursing, my interest peaked because nursing would provide me an array of areas to select from, and yet, no matter what area I chose, I would have plenty of opportunities to fulfill the medical needs of patients.
Additionally, as a nurse, I will be able to assist others both inside and outside the hospital. Nurses are the next professionals after doctors to whom people go to for medical assistance, and as a nurse, I will be able to positively influence individuals' lives everyday and anywhere, whether it be by giving tips about dietary supplements or helping with a mild emergency at a dinner party. Not all occupations allow workers to apply the knowledge of their field outside of their employment place, such as a medical researcher, who must be at their research labs to apply their expertise and for others to comprehend their "research language." Nursing bestows me the privilege to apply my medical knowledge in any situation at any time, which, in turn, will continually hone my nursing skills to serve our society that calls for frequent and quality healthcare.
I can quell their anxiety with comforting words or when a patient is low in spirits,
I think you can replace the "or" with an period.
Take my advice, change this word. How about "ample opportunities"?
Nurses are the next professionals after doctors to whom people go to for medical assistance
mmm, I think nurses are not the 'second person' at all. Nurse is a unique occupation, and I think you know it better than I do. Upon reading the paragraph, I think the idea you want to bring across is that "nurses, who are closer to the patients as they are needed to take care of the patients on a daily basis, will be able to fill the void while doctors are all busy attending other patients". This may not be the best way to word it, but I think this is what you are trying to say.
To be honest I like nurses a lot. I think all inspired nurses are wonderful people.
Ok I am weird...
Why do you want to be a nurse? Students share their sentiments
By The College of St. Scholastica | @StScholastica | Apr 27, 2015
Let's face it—not everyone is cut out to be a nurse. But in the midst of it all, babies are born, lives are saved and life-long bonds are even formed between the medical staff and their patients. This rewarding career path is as multifaceted as it is essential to the medical field.
And what's better? We need nurses now more than ever!
Baby boomers are aging and the need for healthcare professionals is skyrocketing as a result, according to the American Association of Colleges of Nursing (AACN). Nursing schools across the U.S. are struggling to expand at the rates necessary to meet this increasing demand.
The numbers reflect this widening gap. There were more than 750,000 job postings for nurses across the spectrum of specialties in the past year, according to Burning-Glass.com.* The job prospects for registered nurses (RNs) alone are expected to grow at a rate of 19 percent by 2022, much faster than the average vocation.
The field needs qualified nursing hopefuls to step up to the plate. But sometimes a bright job outlook isn't enough to seal the deal for the medical professionals of our future.
That is why we spoke to a handful of nursing graduate students and asked them, "Why do you want to be a nurse?" They identified four distinct reasons why pursuing a career in nursing is worth it.
4 Reasons you should become a nurse
1. It's an exciting, fast-paced profession
The shifts may get long and certain aspects of the job will inevitably become routine, but the life of a nurse is never boring. Whether you're working out of a hospital, a private practice or a palliative care center, you have to be ready to respond to just about anything at a moment's notice.
"I need to be in a fast-paced work environment," says Danielle Mella. "In nursing, every day is different, so there's always something new to figure out. Working as a clinician keeps me on my toes."
From quirky patients to split-second decisions, rest assured that no two days will be alike when you're working as a nurse. This makes nursing a great choice if you're the type who thrives under pressure and craves excitement.
2. It gives you the opportunity to positively impact your patients & community
"I want to be a nurse because I really want to help people through some of their most vulnerable moments," explains Meagan Thompson.
All nurses have at least one thing in common—they want to help people. Not only do they play the role of caretaker for their patients, but in some circumstances, they can also be a friend, a confidante and a trusted adviser. It takes a special kind of person to fill all of those roles the way nurses do.
"Ever since I was a little girl, my empathetic heart took over. When I saw a friend crying, I was the first to go over and comfort him or her," says Brie Peters. After traveling to Guatemala as a young adult to assist an RN in administering medical treatment to underserved villagers, her childhood penchant for helping others transformed into a career dream.
The medical care administered by nurses isn't just a temporary fix—it is also about teaching people afflicted by injury or illness to care for themselves as they move forward. "Empowering others to take control over their health and quality of life will be truly fulfilling," says Elana Goldsmith.
3. It offers one-of-a-kind flexibility
There is a certain flexibility that comes with the profession of nursing—one that can often lead to a longer, more sustainable career. In fact, there are more than 100 different specialties in the world of nursing. These jobs include everything from critical care nurse to forensic nurse to nurse anesthetist.
"There is so much flexibility in terms of the areas that a nurse can specialize in," Mella explains. "It truly makes for a career that will last a lifetime!"
Nurses relish this opportunity to locate the perfect specialty through which to utilize their specific strengths. This plethora of positions means it won't be hard to find your perfect fit.
4. You can experience the benefits of a holistic approach to medicine
"One of the aspects I enjoy most is the holistic approach of nursing care. We are taught not to focus on the specific state of a disease, but rather the patient's response to the disease or illness," says Kara Somora.
She explains that the most effective method of patient care includes not only meeting their physical needs, but meeting their emotional, social and spiritual needs as well. "If any of these components are neglected, a person can't be their healthiest self," Somora says.
Using a holistic approach to medical care allows nurses to treat "the whole person" while also benefitting the nurses themselves—often preventing professional burnout among medical teams.
Join this rewarding career path
Americans consider nursing to be the most trusted, ethically-sound profession, according to a 2014 poll from Gallup. But, as our panel of nursing graduate students revealed, there is a lot more to this multifaceted career path than what is portrayed on TV shows like "Grey's Anatomy" and "Private Practice."
"I believe that patients' willingness to place their lives in the hands of those assigned to care for them demonstrates the ultimate act of trust," Peters says. "It is a great honor and responsibility."
From the flexible job opportunities to the profound community impact nurses can make, this career path has the potential to reap a lifetime of rewards.
If you can identify with these reasons for pursuing a career in nursing, learn more about 9 of the different nursing jobs that are in demand now!
The College of St. Scholastica
The College of St. Scholastica is an independent private Catholic Benedictine college with locations across Minnesota, in addition to many high-quality programs available online and through convenient evening and weekend formats. Since 1912, St. Scholastica has been preparing students for a life of purpose and economic gain by engaging students in the love of learning and active citizenship in the world. Our mission is to provide intellectual and moral preparation for responsible living and meaningful work.